Charles WidderMacbeth Essay Rewrite1/12/18 Macbeth’s death can be viewed as both good and bad. From Malcolm’s perspective Macbeth is viewed as a tyrant who steals his throne. But, when the reader takes into account the contradictions in Macbeth’s character, they learn he is a good man, corrupted by his repudiated conception of morality. There are many factors that go into the perception of Macbeth’s true identity. This controversy is wrapped up in the complex storyline that Shakespeare crafts.
Regardless of the circumstances, one aspect remains: Macbeth is a victim of his own making.Although many students read Macbeth and find satisfaction in his death, they are missing Shakespeare’s most important message: the high price of ambition. Shakespeare means to portray Macbeth as a victim of ambition. In the beginning of the play, King Duncan refers to Macbeth as “O valiant cousin! Worthy gentleman!” Macbeth is treated as an honorable and loyal man.
Duncan views Macbeth as a devoted member to his caucus, therefore, it is ironic that trust leads to both Duncan and Macbeth’s demise. When Macbeth is filled with the prognostications of the witches, he hankers to be king. While Macbeth is drowned with his preconception of being ruler of Scotland, he does not have the capability to impose his will on his life-long friend and king, Duncan.
The very thought of killing the King horrifies Macbeth. Granted, Macbeth has slaughtered countless men for his country on the battlefield, but killing Duncan–his fellow kinsman and respected leader–is treasonous malice. Macbeth’s crime is that he trusted. At the start of the play, Macbeth encounters three witches who prophesize great things in his foreseeable future. Macbeth had confidence in the witches predictions–he trusted them. Unfortunately, he regarded the witches prognosis too highly.
The witches depraved Macbeth of his morale judgement. Macbeth becomes so obsessed with the idea of being king that it drives him insane. Macbeth disclosed his encounter with the witches to his wife. Macbeth trusts not only the witches, but also his wife: Lady Macbeth, who is supposed to help him make critical decisions that affect one and the other.
She in turn decides that the best thing for the both of them is to murder the king. Macbeth allowed himself to get caught up in believing he is capable of ruling the whole nation of Scotland. Macbeth circumscribed in his brain the idea that he was destined to be king. Anybody that tried to stop him would be left in his footsteps, regardless if it was his best friend Banquo, or it was some random soldier, they were to be slain by Macbeth. Macbeth was a martyr for greediness and he succumbed to outside influence effortlessly. Overall, if this level of injustice can impact a great man like Macbeth, it can happen to anyone. Macbeth reacted uniformly to the position he was put in. Very few men would not be driven insane by the ludacris affirmations that were presaged to Macbeth.
Macbeth began his journey as an admirable man–but died of paranoid malevolence. I learned a lot following my conference. To begin, I previously retold the story rather than offering my own commentary regarding the play. I learned that in argumentative writing, it is necessary to provide my own argument rather then just pull evidence from the text. In my rewrite I provided the evidence necessary to prove my warrant true.
I thoroughly explained the evidence I used and how it is necessary in proving my point. In my first draft, I also used the past tense quite a few times, I now can see that the past tense (words like “was”) are not approved for this style of writing. The biggest change from the first draft to the rewrite was my topic sentences and introduction/thesis. Both were very vague and unclear prior to the rewrite. However, in the rewrite, I use various types of punctuation to further prove my point.
I deliver a strong and clear thesis and evident topic sentences. Not only did the structure of my writing improve, so did my use of punctuation. I incorporated hyphens, and colons in various places.
My vocabularily improved immensely as well. Argumentative writing has always been a challenge to me. It is all opinion based and often times I agree with the opinion that has less evidence, so I’m faced with two options: 1) Write a full essay on the point of view I disagree with, or 2) Write an incomplete essay on the side I agree with. I feel like I found the middle ground in this essay.
Originally, I knew the idea I wanted to go with, and I knew that choosing my argument was harder, but I think it really works now that I know how to approach it. Honestly, I felt ill prepared for this essay, I had all my thoughts, I just did not know how to correctly put them on paper. Following my conference, I knew how to project my thoughts into a solid essay, and I believe I did so. The major difference was the element of my commenting was missing from the first draft.
I addressed these needs in the rewrite.